You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - Give details of your study plans - Explain w

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- Give details of your study plans
- Explain why you want to get a part-time job
- Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear John,

I am fine here and hope you to be in the pink of your health. I have opted to do post-graduate in electronics and communication systems in Canada and in your recent conversation you had suggested me the best colleges for the same in Toronto. so I have picked Toronto to pursue my PG in the said stream. Also I have planned to do a part-time job during my study period.

Because of the high fee structure for the course. I can't expect my dad to bear all the expenses. Moreover he has to invest the funds on my Brother's education too. To cut the burden on him. I would like to work part-time to handle partial expenses for my education. I have a good hand at communication with people.

I would be grateful to you if you could suggest me any firms that are hiring personnel willing to work part-time. Kindly Share the details so that I can apply at the earliest.

Yours truly
R Santosh Kumar

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear John, I am fine here and hope you to be in the...
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Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... best colleges for the same in Toronto. so I have picked Toronto to pursue my PG i...
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Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nto to pursue my PG in the said stream. Also I have planned to do a part-time job du...
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Line 3, column 370, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a part-time job during my study period. Because of the high fee structure for th...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...he high fee structure for the course. I cant expect my dad to bear all the expenses....
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Suggestion: Moreover,
...expect my dad to bear all the expenses. Moreover he has to invest the funds on my Brothe...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...good hand at communication with people. I would be grateful to you if you could ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hand at communication with people. I would be grateful to you if you could s...
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Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ls so that I can apply at the earliest. Yours truly R Santosh Kumar
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... apply at the earliest. Yours truly R Santosh Kumar
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 746.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38823529412 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64847021197 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641176470588 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4319886485 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 57.3846153846 76.5299724578 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.0769230769 16.8248392259 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23076923077 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254435748801 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727660229808 0.0766984524023 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700781822038 0.0603063233224 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164705692284 0.12726935374 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728688943743 0.0580467560999 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.8 8.37731958763 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.29 8.71597938144 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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