You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia.Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services. In your letter, explain:when you want to visit the Snowy Mountainshow long you wil

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You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia.
Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services. In your letter, explain:
when you want to visit the Snowy Mountains
how long you will stay
how many students are in your party and what accommodation you will require

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to seek the accommodation in the Snowy Mountains for a group of students from the Perth.

We expect to be in the Snowy Mountains from June 1 to June 12. There are fifteen people in the group including seven men and eight women. The seven men will accept the dormitory accommodation, and the women are happy to share the rooms. We hope to keep our expenses as low as possible.

I would also appreciate if you could please tell me about the other recreational services in the area so that we can prepare ourselves accordingly. The group will bring their boots for the bushwalking, but we are hoping to hire equipment for sports, like skiing. We also want to know about the access to caves and other interesting geological features in the area.

I am looking forward to receiving information about the Snowy Mountains and other facilities.

Yours faithfully,
James

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 32.9175257732 49% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 767.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 159.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82389937107 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73458367325 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 127.690721649 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635220125786 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 231.3 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3457012589 44.8134815571 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18972913824 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653012908187 0.0766984524023 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681864380197 0.0603063233224 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126139570295 0.12726935374 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914328621514 0.0580467560999 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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