Dear Cordelia,
This is my first letter to you in the year, and in particular, after our last meeting at Bryan's wedding about a year ago. Since then, I have been looking forward to discussing with you concerning my career challenges without success until last week when Bryan forwarded your address to me.
I have been having some challenges at work. The pressure has reached a boiling point that if nothing is done, I might find it difficult to cope for another year. First, as you know my stand while I was in Nigerian as a Christian, that I do not like missing attending Sunday services in Church. My current job does not give me the opportunity to attend church at all because of religious victimization. Second, the economy here is quite different from what we have at home. Here, it is a "pay as you go" economy where if you do not work daily, you find it difficult to cope with the bills ranging from heating, energy, rentals and commuting. I have to be putting in extra hours in order to survive and have some savings. Third, apart from the fact that I do not have a free time on sunday, it is also bad that the working hours have to extended to about 10 hours in a stretch such that I am always stressed out by the close of business. This is already telling on my health. Fourth, as a worker in a cement factory, the long term health hazards associated with the work environment cannot justify a longer stay at work than I have already done because of the consequences of long term exposure to cement dust.
For a change Cord, I will appreciate a white collar job instead of this blue collar job I currently do in a strange land. Something that will move me into an office where I can practice what I studied and earned degrees for. I am looking at managerial jobs in the construction and manufacturing sectors where I had previous experience.
I am aware you have been in Europe for about a decade now and you have settled down. I am basically writing to seek for your opinion and ask you to refer me to some of the relevant organizations within your professional network for such jobs. You are well aware of my performance when we were in school together. I have also gone ahead to acquire more qualifications in project management and a Masters in business administration to prepare me for a time like this.
I assure you that I will not disappoint you in any organization where I find favour based on your referral.
Kindly extend my courtesy to your family. I look forward to seeing you during the coming summer holidays.
Thanks a million.
Your sincerely,
Bamidele.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 270, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ess until last week when Bryan forwarded your address to me. I have been havin...
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Line 4, column 486, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... from what we have at home. Here, it is a 'pay as you go' economy where...
^
Line 8, column 86, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...a decade now and you have settled down. I am basically writing to seek for your o...
^
Line 8, column 161, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...your opinion and ask you to refer me to some of the relevant organizations within your prof...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, second, so, then, third, well, while, apart from, in particular, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 3.03092783505 429% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 71.0 32.9175257732 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 26.3917525773 273% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 937.175257732 229% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 469.0 206.0 228% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57782515991 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 3.78020617076 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66350476223 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 127.690721649 199% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54157782516 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 290.88556701 235% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.13402061856 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 12.6804123711 189% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5965098796 44.8134815571 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4583333333 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5416666667 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348690981825 0.216113520407 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912140906932 0.0766984524023 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661922023088 0.0603063233224 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183512778659 0.12726935374 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514146901524 0.0580467560999 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 41.2886597938 235% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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