You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course You now find that now you cannot continue the course Write a letter to the course tutor In your letterDescribe the situationExplain why you cannot continue your course at this timeSa

Dear Mam,
My name is Charlie Wills, I am a student of second semester, studying Genetics as majors. As we have talked before, I am also working as an Embryologist at Seven hills hospital, due to which I am facing problems in continuing my part time course here. My job timings are from 9:00 am - 5:00 pm, and my course starts at 6:00 pm which makes my schedule really hectic and so I am unable to cope up with the curriculum.

I am trying my best to adjust with the timings but as the college and the hospital where i work are situated a bit far from each other, the traffic is taking my most of the time. I have given a lot of thought into this and I have come up with one solution, As in September, a new batch for the course is going to commence, and also at my work place my junior is rejoining, i will be able to take time off a bit early in the second half of my shift. This way I can start the course in the second batch and do my best.

I really hope that, you can consider this changes as it would be really helpful for me to perform better. I am looking forward for your positive reply.
Thank you.

Yours sincerely
Charlie Wills.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 230, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...h I am facing problems in continuing my part time course here. My job timings are from 9:...
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Line 4, column 374, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...t my work place my junior is rejoining, i will be able to take time off a bit ear...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, really, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 933.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 225.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.14666666667 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27022199398 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586666666667 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 288.9 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.9413589554 44.8134815571 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 76.5299724578 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 16.8248392259 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208445140083 0.216113520407 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957228297732 0.0766984524023 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597620286101 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118006321364 0.12726935374 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186649579378 0.0580467560999 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.09 8.71597938144 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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