You have just received a letter from an overseas university saying that your IELTS band
score of 6 is too low for admission to any of its Master’s Courses ( you need 6.5)
Write a letter to the admissions officer. In your letter
• Introduce yourself.
• Enquire about any alternative ways of gaining entrance
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing with regard to a letter I have received from your university indicates that my IELTS score is not appropriate for getting the admission for master degree.
My name is Rahi Honarvar and I got my bachelor degree of science in computer engineering from one of the prestigious universities of Iran which is renowned almost all over the world. It has been 2 months ago that I have applied for a course in Computer technology and science in your university. While I was surfing the university website I recognized that the necessary documents were a coloured copy of my passport, bachelor degree and IELTS document and it was not mentioned anything relevant to the IELTS score.
I would like to know whether there is any alternative that could be used instead of the IELTS document, since I have made plans for starting my study in the next academic year that would be in the next 3 months. Furthermore, this time is not long enough for me to be prepared for this exam.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Rahi Honarvar
- Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem? 67
- Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions. 78
- These days people pay more attention to artists writers painters and so on and give less importance to science and technology To what extent do you agree or disagree 55
- Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own 73
- People in community now could buy cheaper goods. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, look, so, while, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 902.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74736842105 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6844375549 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610526315789 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.055100444 44.8134815571 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.75 76.5299724578 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 16.8248392259 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245668937128 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102243563063 0.0766984524023 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912645894538 0.0603063233224 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156206765337 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117946051046 0.0580467560999 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.