You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.Explain where and when you left itSay what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.

Explain where and when you left it

Say what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir/ Madam,

My name is Ahmed karem, and I am a frequent traveler on your train. I would like to inform you about the loss of my bag on one of your trains. Which is a valuable gift from my father.

On Thursday the 15th of January on train number 55 route B, that was heading from Cairo to Alexandria. When I was going to my office on your train, I had a phone call which distracted me; I probably left the bag on my seat. It was a black leather bag with a silver belt which contains my personal laptop plus my wallet including mw credit card and valuable items.

I would be grateful if you could help me find my bag by taking the required action in such cases. I also request to contact the railway staff who were on duty during that time; moreover, hanging a notice with the bag’s descriptions would be useful.

I am looking forward to hearing from you. Should there be any queries, kindly contact me on 95782521.

Faithfully yours,

Ahmed karem

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e loss of my bag on one of your trains. Which is a valuable gift from my father. On...
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Line 9, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...apos;s descriptions would be useful. I am looking forward to hearing from you....
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 792.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 180.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34822628098 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.655555555556 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 231.3 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4756960485 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3636363636 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 4.34317383033 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12679497434 0.216113520407 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521904356708 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055419759309 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0841442329989 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299725241984 0.0580467560999 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 70.7449484536 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 8.71597938144 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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