You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter Explain why you would like the job give details of why you would

Dear Patel's,
I am writing in context to the advertisement you had given in Australian Times on 24th October, last month for teaching Gujarati language to your kids.

I would like to have this opportunity, as I am really good in Gujarati in terms of speaking and writing both. Being a Gujarati, and having a great command over my mother tongue, I think I will be able to give the best knowledge of the language to your kids.

Apart from that, I can also help your kids to complete their school homework after the language classes. As I Myself am a student, I complete my college at 4:00 pm, and later I do not have anything to do. So, if you wish I can help you instead.

I am really looking for such kind of small jobs, as these will not hinder with my academic studies. I would appreciate, if you give me this opportunity to help your kids learn their mother tongue, and give me a chance to earn a bit myself. I will be waiting for your positive reply.

Thank you.

Yours Sincerely,
Stuti Shah

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 206, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and later I do not have anything to do. So, if you wish I can help you instead. I a...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 241, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... give me a chance to earn a bit myself. I will be waiting for your positive reply...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, really, so, apart from, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42245989305 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45474933037 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593582887701 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6676558039 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 4.34317383033 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24623850049 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968958082519 0.0766984524023 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544295963008 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14297823349 0.12726935374 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401835983913 0.0580467560999 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 8.71597938144 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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