You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter Explain why you would like the job give details of why you would

Dear Mr. and Mrs. John,

Recently I came across your commercial posted in the Australian magazine for a nanny. Hence, I am writing this letter to apply for the job.

A few weeks ago, I successfully completed my previous contract as a babysitter for Mr. and Mrs. Fernandez who live about 2 blocks from your residence. I have always loved being surrounded by toddlers as all my past experience is with a similar age group, thus I was excited to apply for your advertisement.

I have lived in the city of Melbourne for the past eight years and have been a nanny for over seven years having have looked after three different toddlers during my work experience. In 2012, I completed my bachelor’s degree in child psychology and perused child care ever since.

As I find my work very interesting, I usually spend a few after-work hours with the child under my care by visiting a garden or sometimes taking a walk with them. During the weekends, to do my grocery shopping and prepare myself for next week by reading a few books on child care. I enjoy my job and I look forward to discussing more on my application as I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Adlen DSouza

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
... being surrounded by toddlers as all my past experience is with a similar age group, thus I was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 981.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62735849057 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70303598281 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627358490566 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8366080306 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.75 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08333333333 4.34317383033 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215148956539 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750402893327 0.0766984524023 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511353905178 0.0603063233224 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111984084432 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683707140106 0.0580467560999 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.