You recently visited a store to repair your computer but they couldn't fix it , write a letter to the store manager and say,- what was the problem with your computer?- What happened in the store?- What do you want them to do about it?

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You recently visited a store to repair your computer but they couldn't fix it , write a letter to the store manager and say,
- what was the problem with your computer?
- What happened in the store?
- What do you want them to do about it?

Dear Steve,

I am writing this letter in reference to a recent visit for a computer repair at your store. I would like to inform you that the computer gives a blue screen when we reboot it. So I had shown it to the technicians at your store last week.

The technician had a look at it and diagnosed it as a hard drive issue, so consequently, they replaced the hard drive but apparently after replacing the hard drive, the technical glitch repeated itself with a beep sound whenever the computer was restarted. Unfortunately, they were unable to repair the computer and requested me to leave the machine at the store as they needed a few days to diagnose the issue.

Now it has been almost a week and I have heard no news on my computer from the store. I feel disappointed at the customer service your store has provided in resolving a minor issue. I request you to intervene and update me when I can get my computer repaired.

I look forward to your immediate action.

Yours faithfully
vinshu

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Steve, I am writing this letter in reference to...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hen I can get my computer repaired. I look forward to your immediate action. ...
^
Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r immediate action. Yours faithfully vinshu
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, look, so, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 829.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 181.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58011049724 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65818783713 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602209944751 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5335110161 44.8134815571 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 4.34317383033 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294407408829 0.216113520407 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119220654697 0.0766984524023 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614550522391 0.0603063233224 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167343361671 0.12726935374 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848423220316 0.0580467560999 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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