You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:• Explain why you&

Dear Sir,

I saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in The Great Himalayan National Park. I am very excited to saw you planning to go there for a week, I have been looking for trekking in the Himalayas for long. The Great Himalayan National Park is a fabulous place for nature lovers like me and this place is very mesmerize trekking routes. The main reason for my interest in this trip because last time I missed out when I went to Manali due to lack of time.

I would like to ask for information about the exact dates and prices for this tour. Although I have no issues with the budget it will give me the idea of expenditure. I have one concern about my fitness level can you please tell me what kind of trekking you are offering. I slipped off the wet turf one month ago and my right leg injured, however, the injury was not much serious but the doctor advised me to take rest for a couple of weeks. Now you please suggest me can I go with you on this tour. I will look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Bhanu

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e exact dates and prices for this tour. Although I have no issues with the budget it wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, look, so, as for, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 848.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.24 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22959637603 2.54303337028 88% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5273730868 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0909090909 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 4.34317383033 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275126954567 0.216113520407 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107214311187 0.0766984524023 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831738219563 0.0603063233224 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21135256932 0.12726935374 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194741790852 0.0580467560999 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 8.37731958763 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.02 8.71597938144 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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