You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.As an international student in Sweden, you have an account with a local bank. The monthly bank transfer you receive from your parents has been delayed this month due to an error at your parents’ bank.Write

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

As an international student in Sweden, you have an account with a local bank. The monthly bank transfer you receive from your parents has been delayed this month due to an error at your parents’ bank.

Write a letter to your bank. In your letter:

introduce yourself and ask for a loan

say why you need the money

tell how you intend to pay back the money

You should write at least 150 words.

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing to inquire about the availability of short term loan facility as I am an international student in Sweden studying in Sweden institute of technology and having account with your bank for 2 years. My account no. Is 07770100075865

Let me explain my situation, in order to pay fees of my college , monthly financial arrangements are generally made by my parents living in India. This time some errors occurred at my parent's bank might be some difficulty in server or connection due to which funds are delayed beyond the deadline as given by the college for payment of fees.

I urge you to arrange a short term loan of SEK 10,000 for carrying my studies smoothly and meet out living expenses as well. I will complete the whole process as required by the bank regulations.

As soon as I get funds from my parent's bank I will surely disburse the loan.

I highly expect your kind attention to this matter.

Thank you again for your consideration.

Yours faithfully

Smita

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear sir or madam, I am writing to inquire about the availa...
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...tion, in order to pay fees of my college , monthly financial arrangements are gene...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
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... required by the bank regulations. As soon as I get funds from my parents ban...
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...our consideration. Yours faithfully Smita
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...deration. Yours faithfully Smita
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 853.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87428571429 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77698536677 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 127.690721649 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.651428571429 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9742314999 44.8134815571 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3 76.5299724578 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.2 4.34317383033 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305440864041 0.216113520407 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104458495812 0.0766984524023 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551777347398 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13772435351 0.12726935374 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046637545241 0.0580467560999 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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