you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letterExplain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your wo

Dear Sir,
I am writing to request you for your consideration to transfer me to our Head Office in Dubai for 6 months. This opportunity will enhance my exposure to international markets which will help me in dealing with clients of international stature. I think a period of 6 months should be sufficient to learn the skills required to execute deals with multinational companies.

Let me explain my situation, I am currently handling Pan India operations along with a colleague in the Mumbai office. For an uninterrupted operation of work in the domestic market, I shall handover my current set of responsibilities to my colleague who is well versed with the region.

Could you please request the management on my behalf to allow me this stint at the Head Office in Dubai? So, I can hone my skills and acquire international experience. I humbly request you to arrange for the internal transfer, by initiating a mail request to the HR department and consequently keeping the management in the loop for approval.

Looking forward to hearing a positive reply from you.

Yours faithfully,
Mustafa Rassawala

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, look, so, well, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 937.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09239130435 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16302013289 2.54303337028 124% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635869565217 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 288.0 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8940770492 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 4.34317383033 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209734097547 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799514253682 0.0766984524023 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692766250342 0.0603063233224 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105161927626 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496148965384 0.0580467560999 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.