You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the good

Dear Sir,

This is to show my interest in buying Split Air Conditioner and a laptop. Please note that I have been looking specifically for these products for quite some time but to no avail.

Finally I came to know through your advertisement in last weeks newspaper that you have the models I want. Kindly confirm if you have Split Air Conditioner with DC Inverter technology from reputed brands like LG or Samsung and the capacity should be 1.5 tons at least. In addition to this Laptops of Sony, Dell or HP with hardware of Core i5 6GB Ram, and at least 900GB of ROM please note that the laptop should have the configuration for corporate use, as I want to buy it for my business.

First of all, I would like to know what is would be the price of these two items individually. Please specify prices inclusive of taxes as well as exclusive of taxes as there are certain taxes applied on electrical goods by this government. secondly, please let me know how long would you be able to hold it for me after I deposit the booking amount? Furthermore, also confirm if you do not have the specified goods in inventory, would you be able to order them and what would be the lead time to make them available?

Looking forward to your prompt and positive response.

Regards,
Fahad

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...for quite some time but to no avail. Finally I came to know through your advertiseme...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'weeks'' or 'week's'?
Suggestion: weeks'; week's
...know through your advertisement in last weeks newspaper that you have the models I wa...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ld be 1.5 tons at least. In addition to this Laptops of Sony, Dell or HP with hardwa...
^^^^
Line 7, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...on electrical goods by this government. secondly, please let me know how long would you ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, at least, in addition, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1058.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 232.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56034482759 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53060928496 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60775862069 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0996937099 44.8134815571 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8 76.5299724578 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 16.8248392259 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 4.34317383033 288% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266238349252 0.216113520407 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890608015356 0.0766984524023 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876968968669 0.0603063233224 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119043134199 0.12726935374 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120818889863 0.0580467560999 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.