You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.Write a letter to the shop1- ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them.2- Ask what the prices are3- how long they will be able to hold the goods f

Essay topics:

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.

Write a letter to the shop

1- ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them.
2- Ask what the prices are
3- how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to bring to your attention that I aim to buy a Play Station from your shop at your branch near to my house in the town.

Several versions of the Play Station are announced to be released in the market, hence I would like to ask if you have all versions or only specific one related to the standard model which I do not need to buy. I look forward to buying the full-option version with two joysticks. Can you confirm whether you have it or you will be able to order it for me.

Although the prices are known for all models, your shop currently offers discount prices for some gadgets, and I wonder if the Play Station is included or not in the sale. I would request that you share your price list for all models after considering a good discount for regular customers.

I will book only one number of full-options Play Station tomorrow, however I will be unable to come for collection within coming week. I would therefore need to know for how long will you be able to keep it for me till the collection from your branch.

Look forward to receiving your soonest feedback.

Yours Faithfully,

Ayoub.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 136, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...come for collection within coming week. I would therefore need to know for how lo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 943.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49047619048 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39465106884 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.78220514 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247405343082 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989435064996 0.0766984524023 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950427921991 0.0603063233224 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120153197915 0.12726935374 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0941824020662 0.0580467560999 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 70.7449484536 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 8.71597938144 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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