You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home.
Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter:
say which electrical goods you want
ask questions about the cost of the goods and how to pay
explain how you will collect the goods.
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear...
Dear Sir / Ma'am,
I am John, a resident of Forrestfield and I heard about your shop from my freind who lives in that area. I am writing to you in regards to find the possibility of buying a certain electrical good that is only available at your store. As I am located 50 km away from your store location I thought it would be best to order before hand, so that I could make that long distance with the certainity of having the goods I am wishing to.
I am looking for the special edition sound system from Matrix sound version MS 320 E that comes with the high boost mic integrated in it. it also have the option of recording for DVDs and BluRays. Upon all it has feature of connecting to ones computer and tweak the music tracks.
It would be great if you could provide me with the information of cost of the above mentioned special edition piece and options of payment available at your end. if I could pay through a credit card I will be pleased as i will be able to avail the EMI.
Once the order is confirmed I can visit your store during my lunch time which would be around 1 pm on Wednesdays or Thurdays. my work place is 10 km away from your place I will be able to manage.
I will be looking forward to hear from you. Your efforts in this matter is highly appreciated.
Yours faithfully,
John Stansworth.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 126, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...lives in that area. I am writing to you in regards to find the possibility of buying a certa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...egards to find the possibility of buying a certain electrical good that is only a...
^^
Line 2, column 325, Rule ID: BEFORE_HAND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beforehand'?
Suggestion: beforehand
...ion I thought it would be best to order before hand, so that I could make that long distanc...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 420, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...th the certainity of having the goods I am wishing to. I am looking for the special edi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 147, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...igh boost mic integrated in it. it also have the option of recording for DVDs and Bl...
^^^^
Line 4, column 214, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'featured'.
Suggestion: featured
...g for DVDs and BluRays. Upon all it has feature of connecting to ones computer and twea...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...pon all it has feature of connecting to ones computer and tweak the music tracks. ...
^^^^
Line 6, column 163, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...tions of payment available at your end. if I could pay through a credit card I wil...
^^
Line 6, column 221, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ough a credit card I will be pleased as i will be able to avail the EMI. Once ...
^
Line 8, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lunch time which would be around 1 pm on Wednesdays or Thurdays. my work place is...
^^
Line 8, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
...around 1 pm on Wednesdays or Thurdays. my work place is 10 km away from your plac...
^^
Line 10, column 27, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...to manage. I will be looking forward to hear from you. Your efforts in this matter i...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 251.0 206.0 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3187250996 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40605811365 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 127.690721649 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601593625498 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7355883019 44.8134815571 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3846153846 76.5299724578 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.38461538462 4.34317383033 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217334394229 0.216113520407 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752138639745 0.0766984524023 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679474903242 0.0603063233224 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105948114592 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715599539256 0.0580467560999 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.78 8.71597938144 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.