Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:Say why you would like to go on the tripSuggest w

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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.


Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:

Say why you would like to go on the trip

Suggest what you could do to help during the trip

Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing in connection with the three days trip of students out of the country, more specifically Denmark. I am Roxana’s father and I heard from her that you are looking for some parents to accompany students on this trip.

I would like to let you know that I am willing to join this trip as I always want to go to Denmark and visit there. I have heard many things about their wonderful history and the modern technologies they are using. However, what makes it more interesting for me is their culture of cycling. Nevertheless, I can provide some help such as assuring that students are safe all the time as I have worked for the police force over 20 years. In addition, I can help also if a student got injured since I have passed first aid courses though we hope it is never needed,

Could you please provide some extra information about the journey such s date and time of departure? It will be appreciated if you also give some details about planned activities.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Sorena

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...o accompany students on this trip. I would like to let you know that I am wi...
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Line 9, column 117, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... want to go to Denmark and visit there. I have heard many things about their wond...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, in addition, such as, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 898.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70157068063 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57428757094 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65445026178 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 274.5 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.851121361 44.8134815571 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161843289356 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643687208853 0.0766984524023 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719714576744 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837939637422 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296509290513 0.0580467560999 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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