Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:Say why you would like to go on the tripSuggest w

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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.


Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:

Say why you would like to go on the trip

Suggest what you could do to help during the trip

Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing in connection with the three days trip of students out of the country, more specifically the trip to Denmark. My name is Sorena, Roxana’s father, and I heard from her that you are looking for some parents to go with students on this trip.

I would like to let you know that I am willing to join this journey as I always wanted to go one day to Denmark and visit there. I have heard many things about their wonderful history and the modern technologies they are using. However, what makes it more interesting for me is their culture of cycling. Nevertheless, I can offer some help such as assuring that students are safe all the time as I have worked for the police force over 20 years. In addition, I can help also if a student got injured since I have passed first aid courses though we hope it is never needed,

Could you please give some extra information about the journey such as the date and time of departure? It would be appreciated if you also give some details about planned activities.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Sorena

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, in addition, such as, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 928.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51136914849 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 284.4 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4879474764 44.8134815571 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202213277806 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772823037903 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737441909238 0.0603063233224 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109631249859 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568545795762 0.0580467560999 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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