Your family is going to move to another town Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests

Dear Sir/Madam,
I hope this letter finds you good health. I am writing this to enquire about the primary admission for my son, George. At present, we are living in Newtown and planning to shift to Great Eastern town next month. I’ve searched many schools in this town however I am interested with your institution because of your higher academic reputation and better facilities. Let me explain about George academic achievements briefly.

George is 12 years old now. He is currently studying in primary level 5 in Loyola school. He is brilliant and bright student. He scored 93% and A+ grade in his last semester. Apart from that, he is a champion of football. He represented his school twice on the state and national level competitions and awarded by National Sports Council. Furthermore, he also received model people award from his school last year for his code of conduct.

I request you to please give him an entrance in your educational organization. I will send his report cards and reference letter from the current school for your consideration.

Thank you in advance and looking forward to hearing from you.

Regards,

Shravan

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ol. He is brilliant and bright student. He scored 93% and A+ grade in his last sem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, furthermore, however, if, look, so, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 967.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06282722513 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73380662038 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.680628272251 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8590829764 44.8134815571 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.4666666667 76.5299724578 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.7333333333 16.8248392259 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216589372562 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566802446602 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639374882546 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116354963685 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849807363634 0.0580467560999 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.18 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 8.62886597938 58% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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