Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time.Write a letter to the hospital. In your letterexplain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hos

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing to you in response to the advertisement published in the daily newspaper whereby you had asked people to help the hospital by doing unpaid work. I would like you to consider this letter as an expression of interest. Allow me to elaborate on other details.

I have been fortunate enough to be able to do charity work for people in all walks of life throughout my life till now. I take pride in offering myself to help other people who might benefit from my services. The reason why I love to do charity work is the feeling of satisfaction is given to be a reason for someone’s happiness at any point in time. As such, I am willing to give a little chunk of my time to your hospital as well. It is needless to mention that we both will be benefiting from the service to the hospital.

I can enumerate certain services that I have been giving in other places where I have done charity work. It will be my first engagement with a hospital to utilize my services. I have been giving my services to trafficked women to counsel them, children who have been a victim of abuse of any form and women who have faced any kind of trauma in their life etc. I feel that I can start from the lower end and slowly progress to greater heights. Thus, I feel that I can host gaming sessions like tombola, ludo and other board games etc. It will be a good experience for all the people and engage them in something new which will pass their time and make them happy.

If you feel that I can be of some help then I would be more than happy to join from next week as I am ending my engagement with another charity this Saturday as they are closing their gates forever. I am anticipating an early as well as a positive reply. Let me know if you need any other information.

Yours faithfully,
Brad Jason

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir or madam, I am writing to you in response to the a...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her information. Yours faithfully, Brad Jason
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, then, thus, well, i feel, kind of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.48453608247 200% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 53.0 32.9175257732 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 26.3917525773 186% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 937.175257732 159% => OK
No of words: 345.0 206.0 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32173913043 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45366384996 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 127.690721649 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527536231884 0.622605031667 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 485.1 290.88556701 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6152696634 44.8134815571 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8333333333 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 4.34317383033 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 7.41237113402 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251682770933 0.216113520407 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720360258252 0.0766984524023 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730024577963 0.0603063233224 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16508369603 0.12726935374 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10949733354 0.0580467560999 189% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.78 8.71597938144 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.