Đề 2: More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?
There is no doubt that humanity has suffered from unhealthy, severe diseases in recent years.In this case, some require that accient medical methods should encouraged to implement rather than modern treatment programs. From my pecpective, it is mandantory for the government to build a combination of both.
On the one hand, in order to avoid the negative effects of chemical drugs, medical systems should provide patients with antiquated treatment and herbal therapy in hospitals. First and foremost, the use of antibiotic drugs could pave the way for side effects and even cause diseases. For example, weight loss pills are often associated with some health issues, including constipation, dry mouth, restlessness and insomnia. Moreover, it is evident that overconsumption of medicine can lead to serious conditions and even cancer. Herbal products and therapeutic resources, on the other hand, can slow the progression of fatal diseases as an alternative to pharmaceutical drugs.Folk medicine, in particular, as a biological resource, is a safer alternative to chemical pills.
On the other hand, the authorities also need to maintain investments in modern treatment methods. With community development, the prevalence of fast food and junk food as well as sedentary lifestyles are the root causes of unexpected weight gain, which is popular with western people. As a result, ancient treatment methods are not designed to treat diseases such as obesity.Furthermore, it is undeniable that a part of the high mortality rate resulted from outdated medical treatments and facilities. Over the last few decades, as medical fields have advanced, many companies and the government have had more opportunities to conduct and detect a variety of research to deal with strange diseases.Specifically, in the past, there were some terrible outbreaks of uncontrolable epidemics leading to enormous death tolls.
To summarize, it is urgent to apply herbal remedies to modern medicine to reduce the dependence on chemical pills, contributing to reducing the horrible effects of these drugs.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in particular, no doubt, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57232704403 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23854793293 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61320754717 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5832811848 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.666666667 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158749251548 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501824326753 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295746537413 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906065820007 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197471152177 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ealthy, severe diseases in recent years.In this case, some require that accient me...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rnment to build a combination of both. On the one hand, in order to avoid the n...
^^^
Line 3, column 675, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Folk
... an alternative to pharmaceutical drugs.Folk medicine, in particular, as a biologica...
^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a safer alternative to chemical pills. On the other hand, the authorities also ...
^^^
Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthermore
...igned to treat diseases such as obesity.Furthermore, it is undeniable that a part of the hi...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 699, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Specifically
... research to deal with strange diseases.Specifically, in the past, there were some terrible ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...emics leading to enormous death tolls. To summarize, it is urgent to apply herb...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in particular, no doubt, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57232704403 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23854793293 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61320754717 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5832811848 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.666666667 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158749251548 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501824326753 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295746537413 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906065820007 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197471152177 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.