Advertising may discourage people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
By dint of all types of media and hoarding, advertisement has become an useful instrument for people to be kept informed with new products of any companies. However, numerous people assume that advertising leads us to be similar to each other in appearance and even lifestyle. From my perspective, this point of view is well-grounded and this paper will provide justifications for my opinion.
It is no doubt that advertisements provoke us to buy the same things in order to follow trends. As the purpose of advertising is to boost up the sales of companies, campaigns for products are usually launched to create a new trend in teenagers. Therefore, to keep up with their friends as well as the world, youngsters will not resist the temptation of spending money although they know they are becoming alike to others. For example, when the new Iphone 12 was out, hundreds of people came to the Apple stores and waited there for hours to possess the brand-new Iphone.
Moreover, a number of people buy the same thing after watching advertisements since that product is advertised by their idols. A large scale of advertisements invite celebrities due to the huge and massive fandoms of them. Thanks to this medium, are the sales being escalated rapidly. Owing to the fact that people who are that superstar’s fan will not hesitate to buy products for supporting their idols and wanting to look identical to their idols. For instance, Blackpink, which is a well-known music band of Korea; once advertised for Samsung Galaxy A70, various of their fans bought that phone so that they could have a phone that resembled their idols.
All in all, I still insist on the view that advertisements render people to look and act alike.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... and hoarding, advertisement has become an useful instrument for people to be kept...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, no doubt, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90784982935 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82379434241 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590443686007 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7408320897 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.615384615 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171231228776 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688190583818 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550695647468 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118975639983 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347136294529 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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