After completeing school and before going to college or university some students take a year of either to work or travel what do you think is better traveling or working . Discuss the advantage and disadvantage of both approach.
Before starting college or university study . Few scholar want to take a gap for work and travel . With the help of travel and work students get different type of experience in their life . However, traveling distract to student their study and in working student become money minded.
To embark with, traveling is very fruitful for relaxation physically and mantlely and getting information about different things. This is because when learner tired from study they want to take a little gap for doing different activities. Namely traveling journey so on. With the help of these activities they feel relax and collect knowledge about different things where they visit . Whereas, traveling also distract to student from study they visit different place for see beauty and culture . These things may effect on mind they can not concentrate on their study also forget own culture and adopt other culture.
Nevertheless, before enter universities and college good thing to do work because they able to pay their college fees themself and become independent. When students do work they earn money with the help of money they can pay their college expenditures. Also they become independent they get knowledge how to earn money and what is the best place to spend money and understand the value of money. Whereas, working student do work only for money because work become student money minded . They do not give preference other things like study . They only think about money and may suffer from depression.
To sum up , both points have their own value. Thus. In my point of view, learner should give more preference their work because they earn money and survive their life without finencial problems. When they free from work they go for travel to relax their mind.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, whereas, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05498281787 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.426019734 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481099656357 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1769274967 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4210526316 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3157894737 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47368421053 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216993554798 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928776047737 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692097799218 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163317228174 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089516071767 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.