All university students should do some voluntary work to help the local community. To what do you agree or disagree?
In the contemporary era, the majority of university students tend to study main subjects, and ignore community activities such as voluntary work. From my perspective, I hold the belief that voluntary work is beneficial for not only students but also society.
Firstly, students can have rewarding experiences during the process of doing voluntary work. Students only study theoretical lessons at university, so practicing voluntary work will bring students insight into their lessons in books. For example, doing waste collection jobs can help students raise their awareness of environmental protection. Secondly, students tend to spend more time on studying than doing exercise, which results in health problems such as obesity or stress. Therefore, doing voluntary work is also an opportunity for students to improve their physical health. For instance, fundraising campaigns can help individuals enhance their physical health and mobilize financial resources to help poor people or orphan children. In addition, when participating in volunteer activities, you will have the chance to experience new things, meet new people and learn from their life stories. These experiences will help you become more mature, take a more profound look at life and appreciate what you have.
Another point worth noting is that doing voluntary work can also help community. To begin with, volunteering contributes to solving social concerns such as poverty, lack of housing, or polluted environment. For instance, students can take part in volunteer work of distributing gifts to the poor and street children, which solves the food problem for society. Furthermore, volunteering helps connect people together, building trust and solidarity in the community. The society will become better if individuals unite together to overcome foreseeable difficulties.
In conclusion, I strongly agree with the notion that students should participate in more voluntary work to benefit the local community. These voluntary works will not only help students become practical, healthy, and sympathy but also solve social issues and connect people together.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69811320755 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88962741547 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562893081761 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.8240377578 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.588235294 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7058823529 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337119546408 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114148022361 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757204915609 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205353896079 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051756411896 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.78 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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