Anyone with phones can answer calls for both social and personal purposes at any time. More benefits or drawbacks do you think it will bring to both society and individuals?
It is true that the ever advance of modern tele-communication technology has been enabling people to access their phone whenever they want, where ever they are. Although this development possesses some objectionable features. I believe that there are more merits than drawbacks.
Admittedly, allowing people to reach their phone at any time is associated with certain weakness. To begin with its negative impact on working effectiveness, as answering phone calls distract people’s attention from their works. Thereby jeopardising their working efficiency. If such development did not affect workers’ performances, it would not came up with rule that people have to turn off their phone when they are in conferences. In addition, answering phones momentarily threaten people’s safety. The increasing number of car accidents happened around the world played a vivid example here. It is pointed out that more than 20% of the accidents happened on the road is caused by answering personal phone calls when driving.
Nevertheless, despite the disadvantages, it will bring more benefits to both individuals and society if people can pick up the phone call freely. First of all, this development provides people with a simultaneous communication format, which helps them strengthen the sense of intimation with their beloved ones. For instance, with the regular access to person phone, overseas students are able to contact with their parents living in other time zone no matter what time it is. Moreover, answering phone call at any time enables individuals to exchange timely messages so that they can keep in touch with the latest news and information related to their daily life, thereby improving the quality of their life. Furthermore, allowing people to response to their phone promotes the development of tele-communication industry, which provides a driving force for national economic growth.
In conclusion, although allowing people to pick up their phone calls at any time does possess some drawbacks. I am support of the idea that its advantages overweigh disadvantages.
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Essay evaluation report
To begin with its negative impact on working effectiveness, as answering phone calls distract people’s attention from their works.
description: what is the main sentence? it is not complete.
Thereby jeopardising their working efficiency.
description: this is a clause. should not be put alone.
it would not came up with rule that people have to turn off their phone
it would not came up with a/the rule that people have to turn off their phone
it would not came up with rules that people have to turn off their phone
more than 20% of the accidents happened on the road is caused by
more than 20% of the accidents happened on the road are caused by
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flaws:
again need to avoid this sentence structure, look, they are duplicated across the essay:
this development provides people with a simultaneous communication format, which helps them strengthen...
they can keep in touch with the latest news and information related to their daily life, thereby improving (which improves) the quality of their life.
allowing people to response to their phone promotes the development of tele-communication industry, which provides a driving force for national economic growth.
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also need to learn more verbs, those verbs are seen often in other essays too:
which helps
which improves
which provides
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1717 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.332 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.922 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.848 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...henever they want, where ever they are. Although this development possesses some objecti...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 357, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'come'
Suggestion: come
...orkers' performances, it would not came up with rule that people have to turn o...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51242236025 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09098584776 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586956521739 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4705882353 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.411764706 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278489920819 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089631339553 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907373511611 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156018155203 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102112225398 0.056905535591 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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