The best curriculum is not one based on a static body of knowledge, but one which teaches students to cope with change. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the development of world education leads to many modern curriculums and there is an argument that the best curriculum is supposed to be fixed knowledge while one which students should be taught to adapt to adjustments.I agree with this opinion and i will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.
First,the development of the society leads to students being taught to face daily life which makes students become more flexible and helps them to adapt to the society.This is because if students just followed a static curriculum of knowledge,they wouldn’t be able to manage to live in the society.Teaching students to cope with change will make students become more comprehensive citizens to society.Forxample, instead of remaining to open more daily subjects class ,schools should also open some life skills class to improve students life skills that students in the years to come may adapt to society activities for how to married ,how to work in communities ,how to dedicate for life and how they grow and define the way future generations to become a good citizens.
Second, schools should teach students about how to behave and react in challenging life and study situations they haven’t met before that they cannot follow by traditional theory.Because students now obey traditional education with static theories which help them to face their study works in an aspect but this result in misunderstanding from students to main valuables aspects of the works or when they graduate from high school or university.For example,when students graduate from high school to decide whether university they should participate in or when they graduate college they should be taught to ready for understanding factor ,information about whether they should do after college or gap year problems.Hence students should be taught to ready for their future and study situations.
In conclusion,Students should be taught to be mỏe flexible and face daily life to helps them to be well-rounded person in communities and School should teach children to help them prepare for how they behave and react in challenging life and study situation to cope with the change of the times.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26571428571 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0860595045 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465714285714 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 87.0 20.2975951904 429% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 240.242585734 49.4020404114 486% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 460.75 106.682146367 432% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 87.5 20.7667163134 421% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.25 7.06120827912 301% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172413903655 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121609263507 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060335064737 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121609263507 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060335064737 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 47.1 13.0946893788 360% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -16.83 50.2224549098 -34% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.44779559118 244% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 37.2 11.3001002004 329% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.47 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.84 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 9.78957915832 312% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 36.8 10.1190380762 364% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 37.0 10.7795591182 343% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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