The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

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The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and
B in two years, 1960 and 2010.

The given pie charts compare the proportion of workers in three distinct sectors, namely manufacturing, sales, services in Towns A and B surveyed in 1960 and 2010.

Overall, the percentage of people working in town A showed a downward trend in 2010 in comparison to that of 1960’s figures. By contrast, town B workers in the manufacturing and services sector went up throughout 2010.

Concerning town A, In 1960, the manufacturing slice contributed the lowest percentage of workers at nearly 30%, doubling to be the dominant sector in 2010. Meanwhile, the proportion of services and sales recorded a reverse pattern of declining from one third and 40% to half of their first figures in 1960.

In regard to Town B, sales slice ranked top as it contained approximately three-quarters of the pie chart which was then plummeted to 53%. Conversely, the manufacturing and services slices underwent a substantial increase in the percentage of workers. One per ten staff resources went into the manufacturing sector in 1960, skyrocketing to a quarter in 2010, followed by the proportion of services workers.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, so, then, third, while, in regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 24.0651302605 12% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 934.0 1615.20841683 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 179.0 315.596192385 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21787709497 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 4.20363070211 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17770548952 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 176.041082164 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564245810056 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 506.74238477 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.7427873182 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.75 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334736372518 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154789016386 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1137411539 0.0667982634062 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222506267077 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10791887419 0.056905535591 190% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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