Children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic social and commercial perspectives What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures

There is no doubt that in recent years there has been an increase in the amount of pressure which children face. This essay will discuss the main causes of these pressures from academic, social and commercial points of view and propose measures which could be taken to mitigate these problems.

With regards to the academic perspective, many children are constantly worrying about getting high grades and being at the top of their classes. This is because in our society there is supposedly a clear path to success – one has to study hard, be admitted into a top-tier university and, then, get a well-paid job. However, there are examples of people without a prestigious degree who were able to become successful, such as Jennifer Lawrence. To tackle this issue, parents should not press their descendants too hard to do what they think is “the right way” and let them do more what they enjoy doing.

Turning to the social and commercial problems, magazines and the internet have created an idea of a “perfect person”, who buys particular items and looks in a certain way. As children often make role models out of these people, they tend to imitate them, which may result in anxiety and sometimes in serious health problems. For example, if a teenager eats too little to become slimmer, this behavior may result in anorexia. Dealing with these issues involves parents helping their offspring to develop their self-confidence internally, and not externally.

In conclusion, studying too hard and trying to imitate others may lead to anxiety, which may negatively affect children’s health and performance. However, these problems could be mitigated if parents give their descendants more freedom and help them to develop self-confidence internally.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, then, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24475524476 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82411875297 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629370629371 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.9777678924 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 125.0 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250749344627 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079618563519 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0997121949833 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158875195456 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135390924921 0.056905535591 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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