There is a current distressing situation that the external life has burdened the youth with a
wide range of pressures. In this essay, I would discuss several precursors to this issue,
before some viable measures are drawn.
The fact that children are coerced into pressures and responsibilities stems from a number
of root reasons. As far as the academic burden is concerned, it is the escalating
competitiveness of the job market accompanied with the parental over-expectation that is
to blame. The organisations’ demand of a qualified workforce pours into the parents’ mind
a thought that their children have to be successful at school, and many youths today take
studying as an obligation. In addition, some children, mostly those who have special talents
or are born in famous families, may find their personal life in the public interest. The
appearance on the media at such a young age may deprive the junior citizens of an innocent
and carefree childhood. Regarding the commercial pressure children have to encounter,
fast food chains or sweetshops have made them the target customers; and they are dragged
into a chaotic influx of information by both the online and offline advertising campaigns.
In order to reverse such pressures on children, I would like to propose a number of drastic
remedies. Firstly, parents should create a mentally and physically healthy domestic
environment, involving a balance between learning and relaxing. Cooling-down activities
such as sports, drawing or traveling, which are normally affordable, can release the stress
of children brought on by both academic and social burdens. In addition, business morality
has to be emphasised and penetrated by all firms. They should keep their online
advertisements inaccessible to the youth by putting age restrictions on their websites.
In final words, it is unfair for the children to bear any kind of pressure, and every part of
society should exert effort to provide them with a happy youth life.
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- The chart below show the number of working hoirs per week in industrial sector in four European countries in 2002 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, regarding, so, as to, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4213836478 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11004222542 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610062893082 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.716619919 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.142857143 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140234295755 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044461370493 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462064128061 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0364237189895 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556615098624 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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