children are now less active in their free time than in the past. therefore, sport lessons must be compulsory in schools. to what extent do you agree or disagree.
It is true that children have a sedentary lifestyle with less activity in their leisure time. While I agree that more time at school should be allocated to sport lesson, I believe that forced exercise is not efficient way to be more active.
On the one hand, modern life have made people of all ages especially young people less active which can lead to many health problems such as diabetes and high cholesterol, so the physical activity of children should be increased. In this regard, sport lessons must be obligatory in schools which have different benefits. The greatest advantage is that physical activity improves children’s mental well-being. For instance, when children work as team sports competition, they should think to different strategies at a short time and make a best decision to win. In addition, sport help children learn discipline and working with others as a team. In other words, in real life children do not live or work apart from others, so learning how to cooperate with others and team skills ought to be taught from childhood.
On the other hand, some young people who want to stay healthy join a gym out of school in order to take regular exercise, so they do not enjoy compulsory sport. Furthermore, school should allocate a higher budget for educational facilities compared to sport which may lead to the number of educated people in the community will increase which reduce unemployment rate as well as decrease crime rate and positively enhance the people’s life standard. Another negative point of forcible sport class in school is that sport lessons is a waste time of valuable studying time. Teachers should pay more attention to academic subject like mathematics and physics that student are usually weak.
In conclusion, while I acknowledge the idea that children do not have enough activity in their free time, I do not agree that sport lesson is obligatory.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... agree that sport lesson is obligatory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, so, well, while, apart from, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in other words, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02201257862 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69112030127 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575471698113 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9155680085 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.846153846 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2307692308 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283853893675 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112499362172 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834899193207 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216451701452 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859932677489 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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