Children today are not fit and healthy as in past. Discuss the couse for this situation with relevant examples and give your opinion on possible solutions.
Children are the foundation of healthy nation.Presently,gone are the days when youngsters were very active.By contrast,these days juveniles are not fit as fiddle. Here,i would like to account for reasons behind this phenomenon and mentioned the fruitful panacea.
There are manifold points to shore up the reasons of this trend. First and foremost,the major cause behind this happening is unhealthy food. For example,fast food outlets are available at every corner. Besides this,parents are busy in their daily routine therefore they can not keep eyes on their children. Hence,health problems among children are rising day by day. In addition,nowadays adolescents are influenced by technology tremendously. To be specific,youth have tendency to spend long hours on mobile phones and computers to relish their leisure time. Apart from it,health problems soch as weak optics,headache,migraine are spreading their roots.
Further emphasising on my point of view. Initially, children have pressure of vast study syllabus as they have to do study for long hours to meet their expectations. Thence, massive study syllabus leads them toward anxiety and stressful life. Moreover, depiction of illegal activities on television affects remarkably. To demonstrate,juvenile watch scenes of smoking,drinking and gambling and imitate these activities. Thus,by watching these scenes they become victim of bad behaviour and spoil their lives.
Multifarious solutions can be put down to overcome this problem. Firstly,parents should keep eyes on them so that children make sufficient distance from bad activities. What is more,school organisations should decrease the study syllabus so that children can enjoy their school life nicely. Furthermore,parents should aware them about the disadvantages of junk food and should motivate them to eat healthy food.
To recapitulate,it is well said that health is wealth. Undeniably,parents and school authorities should encourage them to eat healthy and fresh food as well as inspire them to take part in outdoor activities. Therefore,doing these things helps them to outshine their parents and society’s name.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. More relative/adverbial clauses wanted
2. There are a lot of sentences with 'should'
3. Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 338 350
No. of Characters: 1768 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.288 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.231 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.577 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.696 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.196 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.247 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.473 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Presently
...en are the foundation of healthy nation.Presently,gone are the days when youngsters were ...
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Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , gone
...e foundation of healthy nation.Presently,gone are the days when youngsters were very ...
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Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: By
...e days when youngsters were very active.By contrast,these days juveniles are not f...
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Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , these
... youngsters were very active.By contrast,these days juveniles are not fit as fiddle. H...
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Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , i
...ys juveniles are not fit as fiddle. Here,i would like to account for reasons behi...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s juveniles are not fit as fiddle. Here,i would like to account for reasons behi...
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...Here,i would like to account for reasons behind this phenomenon and mentioned the...
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Suggestion: , the
...easons of this trend. First and foremost,the major cause behind this happening is un...
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Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , fast
...happening is unhealthy food. For example,fast food outlets are available at every cor...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , parents
... available at every corner. Besides this,parents are busy in their daily routine therefo...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , health
...n not keep eyes on their children. Hence,health problems among children are rising day ...
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , nowadays
...ldren are rising day by day. In addition,nowadays adolescents are influenced by technolog...
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Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , youth
... technology tremendously. To be specific,youth have tendency to spend long hours on mo...
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Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , health
...relish their leisure time. Apart from it,health problems soch as weak optics,headache,m...
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Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , headache
...m it,health problems soch as weak optics,headache,migraine are spreading their roots. ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...migraine are spreading their roots. Further emphasising on my point of view. Initia...
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Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , juvenile
...ision affects remarkably. To demonstrate,juvenile watch scenes of smoking,drinking and ga...
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Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , drinking
...nstrate,juvenile watch scenes of smoking,drinking and gambling and imitate these activiti...
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Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , by
...bling and imitate these activities. Thus,by watching these scenes they become victi...
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Line 7, column 73, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , parents
...t down to overcome this problem. Firstly,parents should keep eyes on them so that childr...
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Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , school
...stance from bad activities. What is more,school organisations should decrease the study...
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Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , parents
...oy their school life nicely. Furthermore,parents should aware them about the disadvantag...
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Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...to eat healthy food. To recapitulate,it is well said that health is wealth. Und...
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Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , parents
...l said that health is wealth. Undeniably,parents and school authorities should encourage...
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Line 9, column 219, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , doing
...ke part in outdoor activities. Therefore,doing these things helps them to outshine the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, apart from, for example, in addition, as well as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83492063492 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.60657276302 2.80592935109 129% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612698412698 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3264531691 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9130434783 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6956521739 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69565217391 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.01903807615 498% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0981042318626 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0261575875893 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0264328264301 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0581619638728 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350974434651 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.94 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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