Describe an idea you have had for improving something at college or work.
You should include:
When and where had you had the idea ?
what the idea was ?
Who you told about your idea ?
and explain why you think that your idea made a difference ?
I would like to talk about my idea in my second company 5 years ago.
My first job was an auditor for an international auditing firm Grant Thornton, so my English was relatively good at communicating with foreigners. After that, I moved to my second company, which is a local company, so my English ability was decreasing. In addition, many of my colleagues hated English and they could not communicate in English. Therefore, I to hire American teacher to teach English for its employees. After I talked my idea to my Director, he appreciated my idea and allowed me to present my idea to our CEO. Fortunately, she agreed and supported my idea immediately. However, it was a difficult for class arrangement at that time because most of staffs got married, so they only wanted to spend time on their families. Due to my company has the working time from 8 A.M, CEO of my company also stimulated English, so the English class were held from 7.30 AM to 9 AM every working day. This provided the employees with opportunity to study and practice English. Before attending the English class, most of employees were afraid and scared to meet the foreigners. After 3 months, it was actually different because most of them felt more self-confident to talk and communicate with foreigners. This is an achievement for the employees in the local company.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 658, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the staffs') or simply say ''most staffs''.
Suggestion: most of the staffs; most staffs
... class arrangement at that time because most of staffs got married, so they only wanted to spe...
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Line 3, column 787, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: M
...y company has the working time from 8 A.M, CEO of my company also stimulated Engl...
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Line 3, column 1016, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the employees') or simply say ''most employees''.
Suggestion: most of the employees; most employees
...sh. Before attending the English class, most of employees were afraid and scared to meet the fore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1115.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 232.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80603448276 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91531981529 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573275862069 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2812937415 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7692307692 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8461538462 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110882250049 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465161185398 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487273976958 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102339991979 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.000119176770749 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.