Describe a place in other countries where you would like to work
Singapore is one of the most dynamic and business-oriented nations in the world with an open economy and numerous achievements in many fields such as tourism, service, science,etc. It is not an exaggeration to say that this island is a dream place for most hospitality-major students and I am not an exception. My lifelong ambition is that I can become a hotel manager in Marina Bay Sand, which is the most luxurious hotel in Singapore, for several reasons.
First of all, this hotel offers a great deal of executive salaries and benefits for employees as well as internships. Research shows that the average salary for a manager in this workplace is SGD 6,000 per month, which is 7% higher than the average in Singapore. Beside the tempting income, the company also pay a wonderful compensation for official employees which covers permanent health insurance and includes excellent holiday entitlement. Therefore, Marina Bay Sands five-stars resort is the dream place where I would like to work.
The second reason is this resort offers not only great learning courses for people who want to be workers in the hospitality management service industry but also secured jobs for international students after graduating. Furthermore, the biggest fear which most students face when choosing hospitality management is the lack of experience in dealing with demanding customers. Understanding this common concern, Marina Bay Sands guarantees that students will be carefully trained with top-rated experts in the most competitive learning environment to ensure they have enough quality as well as professionalism to work in this difficult field.
In conclusion, Marina Bay Sands has a variety of elements forcing me to attempt to study studiously for being offered the scholarship from Singapore universities as well as having opportunities to become a proficient hotel manager.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 176, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , etc
...fields such as tourism, service, science,etc. It is not an exaggeration to say that ...
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Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
... offers not only great learning courses for people who want to be workers in the ho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, sort of, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37966101695 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13181815813 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593220338983 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.9214258644 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.272727273 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8181818182 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6363636364 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0638540243667 0.244688304435 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0343560341036 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868078465151 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0376333127141 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439263151498 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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