In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In many decades or so, the lack of educational provision for children in rural areas in the less developed countries is a controversial issue. While many people think that installing more computers and extending Internet access could handle this problem, I believe that the efficient solution should be to build more schools and employ more teachers.
It is undeniable that in the modern life, computers and Internet connection play an important role in all of areas especially remote rural areas. Firstly, internet access offers unlimited resource of information. Therefore, the youth would be possible to take advantage of distance learning educational programs in a flexible way. This not motivates them to catch up a great deal of up-to-date training in the world and but gives them various opportunities as children in city schools. Secondly, the introductions of computers enables children to acquire many IT skills such as excel, word,... Similarly, they could study about artificial intelligence which is program requiring computer. As the result, this is able to increase diverse future workforce.
On the other hand, I recognize that it is better to follow the traditional education system by mean of having schools and teachers. It is widely known that according practical research, teachers play a fundamental role in the early stage of children development when computers and the internet are little more than playthings such as learning basic literacy and numeracy. In these early years, a teacher is a mentor who will interact directly with kids, enlightens them and instills the value lessons in them.
Another reason is that the more schools in rural communities, the more likely is the realization of the goals of universal education. With proper guidance, they will utilize totally online resource and the educational level in developing countries will be raised.
In conclusion, as we can see there are many aspects to this essay. I would argue that proving more schools and teachers is first vital step to help children approach to the better education system in rural areas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2776119403 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82654571153 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573134328358 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7236519074 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253622949767 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680258719779 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692320500058 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139829970815 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809805694582 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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