In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Education plays an indispensible role in every person's life. Learning becomes especially important to children at an early age, as the young ones form their earliest cognitions and understanding of the world during that period. In less developed countries, education for children becomes a scarcity for those who live far away from cities and the. Some embrace the idea that building more educational institutions and hiring more teachers would alleviate this issue, while others aver that equipping the schools with computers and Internet access is the most significant component.
On on hand, the construction of new schools and the employment of more teachers would undoubtedly impact a greater proportion of the young population. Not only will schools become more accessible to students, but perhaps the teacher-to-student ratio will also increase, providing the young ones with more resources and assistances. However, this plan may be too idealistic——the cost of establishing more schools, hiring new teachers, and supplying new students with textbooks and stationery is enormous, and if there are no available sponsors or donors, perhaps there will not be enough financial support to initiate this program. Given that the issues are taking places in developing countries, then perhaps obtaining government fundings for education may yield unfavorable results as well, since the majority of the federal fundings may have already been distributed to some other areas such as agriculture or infrastructure.
On the other hand, schools in developing countries would certainly appreciate the supply of new technologies in teaching, as computers and access to the Internet would speed up the learning process and expand the students' perspective of the world. In this manner, teaching will not be restrained to the traditional classroom style, but it will encompass a greater sophistication and breadth for the students with the aid of technology. Nevertheless, an apparent shortcoming of this plan is its limited impact on the educational system. Since computers and Wi-Fi devices must be installed in existing schools, there would not be any opportunities for those who have yet to experience the privilege of education. In other words, students from wealthier families will only enjoy a higher-quality education, while students from poorer families will still be deprived of their chances to attend school. This blatant polarization of educational opportunities is detrimental to the growth of a developing country's future generation, and it may even create a sense of social segregation that would later become only more deleterious to the development of a country.
Personally, I am more in favor of the first solution. Despite the difficulty of obtaining the necessary funding to build more schools and hire more teachers, I still believe that influencing more children and creating a more equal learning environment is beneficial to a country's future development. For one, there would a larger proportion of the workforce that has received an education, and two, due to the increased number of students, there would be a more diversified group of future potential workers that would fit the needs of job specialization.
In conclusion, there are both merits and shortcomings of the two proposed ideas. On one hand, the construction of new schools would certainly benefit a larger majority, but the obtaining the essential fundings may also prove to be arduous. On the other hand, despite equipping existing schools with better technology enhances the quality of education, only a small portion of students will receive this benefit, and such polarization should not be encouraged. I favor the former standpoint, and I believe that, although acquiring the necessary financial support may be challenging, it is still the more favorable method to conduct.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...on plays an indispensible role in every persons life. Learning becomes especially impor...
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Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...those who live far away from cities and the. Some embrace the idea that building mor...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: On
...is the most significant component. On on hand, the construction of new schools a...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'school'
Suggestion: school
... of the young population. Not only will schools become more accessible to students, but...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... up the learning process and expand the students perspective of the world. In this manne...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, well, while, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 7.85571142285 331% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 26.0 10.4138276553 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 41.998997996 174% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.3376753507 312% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3286.0 1615.20841683 203% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 598.0 315.596192385 189% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49498327759 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94510247834 4.20363070211 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14378958221 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 176.041082164 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481605351171 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1008.0 506.74238477 199% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 0.809619238477 1112% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.9383495234 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.476190476 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4761904762 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.67935871743 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225630613907 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666130213137 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413786652944 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135065047034 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0118651848609 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 168.0 78.4519038076 214% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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