Do you agree or that improvements in technology reduce the role of olympic games

Essay topics:

Do you agree or that improvements in technology reduce the role of olympic games.

These days, it is a serious concern that how far technology changes in the various fields. But what more important is, should technology development minimise the impact on olympic games? Personally, I strongly disagree with this idea and I shall highlight my views in the following essay.

To begin with, advancement in technology is on a different high and changing at an enormous rate. Also this influence on various sport game such as olympic. Firstly, main benefit of reforming technology in sport is security. This is because vast number of public are available in the stadium. To illustrate with, by providing high alert security to the athlete and coaching staff highly configure CCTV cameras and other such gadgets are obligatory. Secondly, peoples are aware about various cultures and traditions as they are meeting with several kinds of masses in the stadium. Moreover, olympic games are providing benefits to the country's economy as well by establishing different types of tournaments at various locations. In fact olympic tournaments are scheduled every four years so more number of pupils watching this.

Furthermore, the athlete of olympic games are role model for juveniles and childrens feels enthusiastic watching live there role model. With the aid of improvement in technology, they see their videos or highlight even after offspring can practice on their own. In addition, there are different kinds of sports resources are also available in the market which athlete wear so this is also lucrative for peoples.

To conclude, far away technology has been improved and this improvement provides plethora of pros to the olympic games; therefore, I believe these changes are indispensable for spreading popularity of olympic games.

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Average: 7.2 (9 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38405797101 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82069347842 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597826086957 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1621159248 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0666666667 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184500460617 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560267195892 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726385110278 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133636246581 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864597278849 0.056905535591 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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