Extreme sports such as skydiving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
In recent years, the prevalence of extreme sports as well as the danger they present have raised the question whether they should be prohibited. I strongly believe that these activities are relatively safe when done correctly and should not be deemed illegal. This essay will first mention precautionary measures that have been implemented to improve participants’ safety then go on to illustrate the benefits these sports offer.
The suggestion of banning extreme sports on account of the risks they pose is not well grounded as they are actually much less perilous than people are led to believe. Unlike the stigma of being reckless or self-destructing activities, most extreme sports require the participants to strictly adhere to accepted protocols to guarantee maximal safety. For example, these sets of rules and regulations dictate that people who take part in extreme sports are required to undergo appropriate training so that the dangers are minimized. Besides, beginners are not allowed to do these sports solo and must be accompanied by an experienced professional. Furthermore, the innovations in terms of protective equipment have made accidents less likely to occur. As is often the case, players are fully equipped with state-of-the-art gear, which drastically reduces the likelihood of fatal consequences that may result from any simple mishap.
Moreover, when the benefits these activities provide are taken into account, banning them would be unimaginably detrimental to the nation’s economy and well-being. Like their conventional counterparts, extreme sports generate a plethora of income contributing to the national economy. Specifically, the industry creates thousands of jobs manufacturing equipment and contributes millions of dollars in tax to the nation’s treasury. Besides, the high-risk-high-reward nature of these sports encourages players to keep up an adequate level of physical fitness as well as mental stability. For example, in mountain climbing, participants are instructed to get fit and stay in shape by doing a series of lesser challenges before they can finally take on their main goals, considerably benefiting players’ stamina, agility and flexibility.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... as the danger they present have raised the question whether they should be prohibited. I strongly b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68580060423 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24281085418 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634441087613 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5642431557 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.428571429 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6428571429 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182196096819 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599010130685 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413118695875 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125921944242 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391372354631 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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