In family, father and mother both are equal important to their children. Though, women are responsible to childbearing, but other factors also have significant effect to take decision whether or not to have babies. I strongly believe, father and mother both have equal responsibilities and both of their decisions are important to have babies.
Firstly, before taking decision of having baby, couple should think that they are ready to have child and they have financial and mental preparation too. During childbearing, women endure drastically due to physical and mental changes. Hence, before taking decisions, women should be prepared mentally consider this suffering and as a breadwinner, men should be prepared financially to rear their children. However, father's duties not only donating sperm but also they have to change diapers at middle of night. If father and mother both consider these factors, they would decide to have their babies.
Secondly, the ideology, mothers are only responsible to nurture their kids is omitted now. Nowadays, women are not confined in four walls room as housewives. They are also working and take significant responsibilities to support their families. Now this is the time to abolish old ideology. Father and mother both can share their responsibilities. For instance, mother will send their children at school in the morning, and fathers can pickup them after finish their classes. However, if children have equal contact with their parents, they would be good person in their future lives.
In conclusion, in modern era, fathers and mothers both are important for rearing their children. It is not possible to bring-up adolescents solely, because mother and father have different types of role to develop children's psychologies.
- When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 78
- There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that heard everywhere nowadays? 61
- Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. 73
- "Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." - rewrite 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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...s. I strongly believe, father and mother both have equal responsibilities and bot...
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...they would decide to have their babies. Secondly, the ideology, mothers are only...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42960288809 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79870255528 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534296028881 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4079937602 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4705882353 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2941176471 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190247824358 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706736123925 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432923156297 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129029722825 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0100460849723 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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