There is a controversial debate regarding role of parents to rearing their minors. In some culture, people think that, mothers are only responsible to nurture their children. I personally believe that, fathers have a significant role to rearing their minors.
On one hand, people argued that, father's role to nurturing their babies are crucial, while this is one hundred percent true. Although, father's don't have much time to spend with their children, because they spend their maximum time to be a breadwinner and ensuring standard lives for their families. However, they get free time in evening and weekend. Hence, they should spend their time with their babies and take responsibilities to bringing up them. For instance, mother's become tried at night after whole day’s hectic works and nursing their kids; hence, father’s can take care their babies and spend quality times with them, which could give some relax to mother.
On the other hand, mothers' role to nurturing their babies could not be omitted. However, a mother taking care every steps of their children’s growing stage. Children learn socialism and fundamental manner from mother. However, nowadays, mothers' are involving in different dimension of works, like join in a job or social activities; hence they need time for themselves rather than only nursing and preparing food for families. Therefore, fathers' can share some responsibilities with mothers and give them some opportunities to do their own works.
In conclusion, nowadays, people live in cooperative era, where father and mother both share significant duties to nurture their children which have better impact on children's development. I strongly believe, fathers’ role is as much crucial as mothers’ role to rearing their children.
- Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. 73
- When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 78
- There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that heard everywhere nowadays? 61
- "Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." - rewrite 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...hundred percent true. Although, fathers dont have much time to spend with their chil...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...from mother. However, nowadays, mothers are involving in different dimension of works, like j...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46762589928 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80518348718 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561151079137 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8096792475 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.333333333 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5333333333 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14142063523 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593400373301 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412739559866 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942925420048 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301765274035 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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