The government should increase spending on defence and spend less on social benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The government should increase spending on defence and spend less on social benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It is argue by certain individuals that more money should be allocated in safeguarding the nation while other says that little fund should be a portion to social needs. I believe both should be given equal attention but i strongly agree that more money should be spend on social benefits. This will be discussed in this essay.
To begin with,government of a country need to ensure there is adequate fund for the security department. As it is their responsibility of securing lives and properties of the resident. For instance, in Nigeria with the insurgent of boko Aran killing people and destroying properties, the security department always beef up there defences by buying sophisticated ammunition to fight them. Also, each state do have money a portion for state security to ensure,there is no arm robbers killing people or a civil war within the community. This is possible by having police force and other neighbourhood law and enforcement agencies to monitor and check mate members activities.
Despite this, more money needs to be given to social benefits so that more basic social needs of the community can be met. If the welfare of the community is put into consideration such as making available portable drinking water. Members of the community will not be falling sick constantly. Thus, it will reduce the way they visit the hospital for treatment, hence, this will increase their productivity at work. Furthermore, there should be creation of more job opportunities if there is employment for people, they can afford and meet up with expected standard of living. By so doing, this will also contribute to the economic of the nation in return because workers can pay their taxes. As people can enjoy the social needs provided by the government.
In conclusion, as it is good to spend money on both the defence and the social benefits of a nation, i however, opined that more should be a portion to meet the social needs, as this will prevent illnesses and thus,burst productivity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'argued'.
Suggestion: argued
It is argue by certain individuals that more money ...
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Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uals that more money should be allocated in safeguarding the nation while other s...
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Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spent'?
Suggestion: spent
...trongly agree that more money should be spend on social benefits. This will be discus...
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Line 1, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...benefits. This will be discussed in this essay. To begin with,government of a c...
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Line 2, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , government
...iscussed in this essay. To begin with,government of a country need to ensure there is ad...
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...y a portion for state security to ensure,there is no arm robbers killing people or a c...
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Line 3, column 445, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...y at work. Furthermore, there should be creation of more job opportunities if there is e...
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Line 3, column 730, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs provided" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'providing' or 'to be provided'.
Suggestion: providing; to be provided
...s. As people can enjoy the social needs provided by the government. In conclusion, as ...
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Suggestion: , burst
... as this will prevent illnesses and thus,burst productivity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98203592814 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85873431139 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532934131737 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9610786012 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149095841796 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466221413818 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663048637202 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106372457016 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622031357533 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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