Governments should support care and finance for retired people while others believe that they should save money when they get older Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Governments should support care and finance for retired people while others believe that they should save money when they get older. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

All people in the world set a same goal for their life when they come to the retired stage. It has been argued by some individuals that governments should provide healthcare and money-related assistances for retirees, while others express their discontent that it is no longer suitable when people have to know ways to be a master of their life. In my opinion, people should save their own money to freely use when they get older.
On the one hand, governments should create health and financial welfares to aid retired citizens. It means that this is as a way of compensation for their contribution in their youth. The development of cities and a country comes from a huge amount of tax payments of big businesses as well as the national budget is also enriched from that. Additionally, each individual of a country also contributes to businesses’ profit to help them pay taxes when they spend a significant amount of money on basic necessities such as clothes, furniture or vehicles. Furthermore, authorities, officials and police officers receive their each month wages from tax money. But it is not advisable for governments to spend excessive amount of money on social welfare as it could be used to solve pressing social issues such as environmental pollution or housing price crisis.
On the other hand, it is better for retired people to save a sum of money during their working time because this allows them to have a sense of independence. It means that they will not depend entirely on anyone else. Each one also have a private demand for basic necessities, entertainment. When having an own money saving, retirees can freely organize and satisfy their goals and expectations in their young time such as travelling worldwide, buying a home for their children. Moreover, obviously, the national budget can not suffice to pay every each citizen needs.
In conclusion, it is essential to have a sum of money saving for each individual when they can do whatever they desire instead of relying on the government support.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
... spend a significant amount of money on basic necessities such as clothes, furniture or vehicles....
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Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...Each one also have a private demand for basic necessities, entertainment. When having an own mone...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of relying on the government support.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95321637427 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83875816675 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540935672515 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7736579728 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.933333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298701791293 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108490600356 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102870708514 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212993531732 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0978353828937 0.056905535591 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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