Governments should support care vs finance for retired people While they should save money when they get older Discuss both views and give opinions

It is true that elderly people who have retired are in great need of care and financial support. Although I accept that the government should look after and financially support them, they need to have their own savings because the national budget does not suffice to pay for everything each citizen needs in their life.

On the one hand, it is necessary for the government to provide care and financial aid for retired citizens because each of them has certain contributions to society. Economically, some people enrich the national budget through the taxes they pay, while others spend money on commodities and services when going shopping, which allows businesses to earn profits and pay taxes as well. Such taxes can be used by the authorities to develop their country, such as building hospitals, and pay for officials like police officers or politicians. As a way of compensation for their devotion in their youth, the government ought to offer the elderly money-related assistance and care services, for example, regular free-of-charge health checkup.

On the other hand, the elderly should not entirely rely on the governmental support as this can cause a huge financial burden on the state budget. However wealthy a country can be, it can hardly satisfy each of their people’s demands, so every individual in society should save their own money to cover their non-essential expenses. Without a sum of savings, they would face a lot of difficulties when they need to afford entertainment or new fashion items. It is not advisable for the government to spend excessive amounts of money on public welfare as this will harm the budget used to solve pressing social issues such as environmental pollution or the housing crisis.

In conclusion, I believe the government should assist retirees with money and take care of them, but it is each retiree that needs to save certain amounts of money to stay financially independent.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10062893082 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81881712689 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550314465409 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.9687308424 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.454545455 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.72727272727 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282266350151 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108544513649 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403031980584 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181615738372 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144919794998 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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