The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health issues involved.Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Obesity is increasing, putting a strain on the health care system by attempting to handle the health issues involved. Completely agreeing since obesity causes some serious physical damage, adding pressure on hospitals, doctors, clinics, and etc… Introducing more physical activities at school would for sure decrease level of obesity among the students; therefore, less bullying and lower amount of insecurity.
To begin with, corpulence levels would definitely decrease by adding more physical activities throughout the day. Since, children tend to love sweets and sweets increase the amount of fats in the body and this causes obesity on the long run. For that reason, sports will burn the amount of calories that were gained from the sweets thus decreasing the accumulation of fats. For example, if every day the students had 15 minutes for only physical activity they would even lose weight.
Moving on, it is known that it is difficult for overweight children especially teenagers to have self confidence. The children will see that that they aren’t as energetic as their friends and teenagers will see that they aren’t as fit as the models on the internet. Hence, sports will boost the student’s self confidence and will improve his mental health. For instance, a student playing volleyball will burn calories as also enjoying his time and knowing how to play volleyball will eventually uplift his confidence.
To end with, sport has many advantages and one of the most important is decreasing the pressure on health care systems by decreasing obesity. Increasing activity lessons will result in a healthier population with healthier children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43129770992 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75022182068 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587786259542 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.84646136 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.583333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110341244106 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447160073909 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483815688014 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745728159252 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547628821415 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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