Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the crime is one of the biggest worrying in society, where several events which is happen then presents a negative effect. This case influence the welfare in communities, it is due to some reasons.
On the one hand, delinquency is a serious problem today, therefore when this happen is ignored many negative impacts that will matter. For example, one of people who is given a freedom to playing a toys such as carry gun, it will encourage them to commit an offence because they are get used to think a violence like a war and other similar. As result, this habitual allow the people to carry guns which give a potential to commit an offence. In conclusion, the individual should be avoided with anything that influence them to becoming an offender and avoid them to watch a crime.
On the other side, because of the growing of violence in society, should be existence policy to protect the people as high as the crime which is becoming controversial. Base on this statement, there are several people who are given a responsibility to carry guns even let them to learn deeply how to use it, it is due to some reasons. Firstly, the welfare must be protected by special officer who have an ability in this field, meanwhile they are obligatory to have a special guns. Secondly, the people who is becoming policy must be struggle to reducing the delinquency which is around in public. Finally, the policy need an extra exercise from professional coach in this field.
To sum up, in my point of view, I agree with the statement that the individual should be avoided to carry guns as well as avoid the rising of the crime, accept to the people who is becoming a special trainer as a policy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
... society, where several events which is happen then presents a negative effect. This c...
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Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'influences'.
Suggestion: influences
...n presents a negative effect. This case influence the welfare in communities, it is due t...
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Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: freedom
...For example, one of people who is given a freedom to playing a toys such as carry gun, it...
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Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a toy' or simply 'toys'?
Suggestion: a toy; toys
...eople who is given a freedom to playing a toys such as carry gun, it will encourage th...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...owing of violence in society, should be existence policy to protect the people as high as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65780730897 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58224394608 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495016611296 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.1730207679 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.833333333 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204903543744 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750496377513 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669965477791 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13247239061 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544778372659 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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