People have different views about whether they should take ricks to gamble for better careers or uplift their personal lives. While there are some adventages to choose take risk, I believe that avoiding the disadventages of taking risks are more desirable in contemporary society.
On the one hand, taking risks usually regard as a indispensable spirit of success. However, the danger of taking risks is under water, people underestimate price of failure that they have to account for it. As an illustration, Elon Maske had failed for several times before he finally succeed. But somehow, taking risk is regard as the main reason to his achievement. Besides that, taking risks truly can extend our knowledge and get a energetic personal life, you can make some friends during that process, getting a higher life quality due to be improved in career. That are extremely charming for younger who just graduated from university, the big risk is accompaned by remarkable rewards. There can be argued why some people prefer take risks in their career and personal lives.
On the other hand, adventages of avoiding take risks seem to be more important in contemporary time. Firstly, with the development of atificial techonology and globalisation, everyone feel live in a more turbulent world than ever before. Avoiding risks not only provide a stable income, but also offered pension and insurance by goveronment which could protect familiy from illness and unemployment. Secondly, People who avoiding risks are less anxious about work, because they do not face the unpredictable chanllenges everyday. Last but not least, avoiding risks could balance life and work, people are merely required to work at a fixed time, so they could left some leisure time to accompany family and friends.
In conclusion, taking risks may have some benefits to people, but i believe follow the traditional chioce avoiding risks is more reasonable in nowdays.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to take'
Suggestion: to take
...ile there are some adventages to choose take risk, I believe that avoiding the disad...
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Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ne hand, taking risks usually regard as a indispensable spirit of success. Howeve...
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Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
...led for several times before he finally succeed. But somehow, taking risk is regard as ...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... truly can extend our knowledge and get a energetic personal life, you can make s...
^
Line 5, column 521, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... not face the unpredictable chanllenges everyday. Last but not least, avoiding risks cou...
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Line 5, column 661, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'leave'
Suggestion: leave
... to work at a fixed time, so they could left some leisure time to accompany family a...
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Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s may have some benefits to people, but i believe follow the traditional chioce a...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23397435897 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71337718769 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608974358974 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4250219248 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.866666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368891570586 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129808190832 0.084324248473 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668604451496 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228478561199 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718056814648 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.