It is inevitable that as technology develops traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible. You cannot have both together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Technology and tradition are two sides of a coin called culture. They are often viewed as being conflicted and will never be compatible with each other. However, it is still worthwhile to investigate the possibility of coexistence of tradition and technology.
It is an undeniable fact that some traditions have been replaced by machines, the scientific and technological solution to achieve better efficiency. Firstly, utilising machines will lose the making of some handicrafts. Computer integrated manufacturing can produce superior merchandises at higher rate and lower cost than man made goods. Secondly, technology brings a change of paradigm about time. Everyone is living a much faster life than in the past. As a result, tradition ceremonies which were being held for a long period of time are being shorten gradually. The spiritual meanings behind these ceremonies are slowly lost over time.
On the contrary, it is observed that many traditions still flourish with the aid of science and technology. A prime example would be fireworks. Complex colours have been added to traditional fireworks resulting an even more spectacular sight. Computer-controlled triggers also allow fireworks to be launched at different precise timings enabling more complicated shape rather than the traditional sphere. Another example would be craving for traditional moral values and design. This can be shown through the ever increasing number of participants in traditional arts such as swordsmanship, and tea ceremony in Japan.
In conclusion, traditions and science can coexist. Tradition is always an unless inspirational source for technology while discoveries of technology reinforce the value of cultural traditions.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 258 350 //better give around 300-350 words
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.333 21.0 //need more complex and compound sentences
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 258 350
No. of Characters: 1428 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.008 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.535 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.113 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.955 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.481 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 524, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...monies which were being held for a long period of time are being shorten gradually. The spirit...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68992248062 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18897807377 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65503875969 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0322215198 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5555555556 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3333333333 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259180969941 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779474726552 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497141247702 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168936686769 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256031236483 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.34 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.13 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.