It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view

Nowadays, it is claimed that the loss of traditional cultures in some regions is mainly caused by technological advancement. As a result, modern technology can not co-exist with cultures, and they might eliminate each other. In my opinion, I do approve that technology comes and menace cultural development within some ethics and nations, however, I also believe that if we utilize this device precisely, not only our life is facilitated, but our traditions are also be generated and enhanced.
On the one hand, a group of people considers technology is a threat to the existence of their ethnic traditions. Accordingly, in our contemporary world, where people, especially youngsters are inclined to online shopping, social entertainment platforms as the most negative impact raised by technology breakthrough. In addition, technology facilitates and satisfies lots of humans' living aspects, from convenient meals to learning and working devices, therefore, other old-fashioned materials associated with a population revolution will lose their attractiveness. For example, a traditional musical instrument in Vietnam such as dan bau can be replaced by a virtual reality one in a smartphone or a laptop.
Nevertheless, we can exploit the prominence of technological and virtual platforms to promote and widespread a country's traditional cultures. To be more specific, cultural content creators should probably use Youtube or Facebook to publicize their national cultures towards the globe. For instance, Liquizi, formerly known as a Chinese youtuber who has a comprehensive understanding of Chinese cultures and design remarkable sort of videos that engage the world with her country's valuable and respectful tradition.

Eventually, I do not refute the damaging effects of contemporary technology on ancient cultures. However, I ensure that by using technological applicants wisely and appropriately in parallel with excitement and dedication towards honourable traditions, we can facilitate our life and also preserve our origins.

In conclusion, I agree that technology will restrict cultural existence except that we combine them properly.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78233438486 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32294519849 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9211870159 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6923076923 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329293055751 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112282890135 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573439259974 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182088142026 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622387106724 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.54 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.15 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 78.4519038076 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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