It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Technology has transformed the world from primitive to advanced one. However, I disagree with this view, that older culture acts as conflict towards the new advancement, but this is not the case.
Some people argue that, technology captured the whole world. This is true to some extent, nowadays, job opportunities being open globally, people tend to migrate towards western developed countries to earn and secure themselves financially. Due to this migration they try to follow the western lifestyle and this has spread all over due to which traditional attire in eastern parts has taken aback. On the contrary, this advancement has also given us the chance to re-visit our histories, cultures, languages through many websites. Furthermore, this type of invention helps us to store the required vital information regarding our culture. For instance,Many of the traditional languages are getting extinct, but these can be learnt and preserved on websites.
However, I disagree with the idea of wearing traditional attire has fallen back in eastern parts of the world. In India during festivals or even during any occasion females still prefer to wear traditional clothes gracefully like saree and also celebrate festivals in the traditional pattern by taking in account all the rituals associated with them. This also, creates a path to transfer the cultural knowledge to the future generations. Therefore, these values can be kept in existence and make our roots stronger. Secondly, in olden times families were staying together which is still present in many parts of India. Lastly, traditional value such as respect to one another and elders is been nurtured globally.
To conclude, technology is a necessary part of human existence and I believe traditional culture should be given more importance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38028169014 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84304767029 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62323943662 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6963085724 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.866666667 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286116766208 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871991646128 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612781592051 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18999281038 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387415164008 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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