It is true that some commentators argue that it is more important for children to study the history of their own country or region, rather than the history of the world. I disagree with this view, because I believe that schools should teach local, national and world history.
On the one hand, it is significant that schoolchildren should learn about their local history. Firstly, knowing about the past of their region or country will foster a sense of belonging and pride in each child. For example, by studying how earlier generations fought and made sacrifices for the freedom of the country, Vietnamese youngsters will appreciate more the value of the way of life and liberty that they enjoy today. Secondly, young children also learn about the origins and core values of their motherland through history lessons. As a result, they will gain a deeper understanding of each traditional event, and be motivated to carry on the best customs for generations to come.
On the other hand, the value of studying world history must not be underestimated.The modern trend towards globalization makes it all the more necessary for schoolchildren to have some knowledge of people from other ethnic groups and different traditions. Armed with this broader perspective, it will be easier for them to form a mutual understanding if they know about the origins and past development of other people across the world. Another important factor is that a study of world history provides youngsters with an overview of the inter- relationship of nations and how international historical events, such as the end of colonialism, have shaped contemporary society.
In conclusion, I would argue that it is equally important for schoolboys and schoolgirls to study local history as well as world history
- The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools.’ How far do you agree with this prediction? 84
- Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
- Children's education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages 73
- The world natural resources are being consumed at an ever-increasing rate. What are the dangers of this situation? What should we do? 78
- As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree? 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...orld history must not be underestimated.The modern trend towards globalization make...
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Line 3, column 535, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...provides youngsters with an overview of the inter- relationship of nations and how intern...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14089347079 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94671485671 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536082474227 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9209608678 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.0 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1818181818 7.06120827912 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325164211557 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127868576764 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077068930413 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223087324662 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848263621971 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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