It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
World history appears to be difficult and complicated to learn with avalanche of changes, events and figures over thousands years. That is why a number of people opine that children should be educated mainly about their local history instead of a wider range. However, I disagree with this perspective for some reasons.
First of all, teaching the world old days at school can influence children’s mindset and awareness about our planet in a positive manner. Human beings around this globe are different in term of races, nationalities, and background but there are some individuals cannot understand those differences. In order to change this circumstance, history in large scale should be taught at school, which pupils can glean important pieces of information about various aspects of life; therefore they would become more tolerant, considerate and wiser. Students will not evaluate situations merely based on their own subjective opinion but more objective perspective.
In addition, local historical events is as important as the world past; however to comprehend historical stories of our own place or nation, it is vital to initially obtain knowledge about past time of this planet. Many events in other continents, countries, and regions were in sync with ours. This can be a great approach for students to effortlessly comprehend their own local past by making connection between those circumstances. To take Vietnamese schoolchildren as an example, they learn about when the American had George Washington state the Declaration of Independence mentioning about number of values of an independent country or peoples. Vietnamese students can comprehend our own Declaration of Independence read by Ho Chi Minh thoroughly by accomplishment of the previous version writing in advance. In other words, general knowledge about the global history appears to be great foundation for school learners who are going to explore their native yesterday.
To sum up, despite the necessity of understanding about local past events, the extensive knowledge of bygone time should be priorities. Children at school can be more conscious of various aspects of life and easily glean information about their regional past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 117, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive manner" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... mindset and awareness about our planet in a positive manner. Human beings around this globe are dif...
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Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...tal to initially obtain knowledge about past time of this planet. Many events in other co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, therefore, in addition, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.472303207 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97259452343 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586005830904 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3777256618 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.133333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209339807626 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679092688734 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428734809384 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132225224934 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399756171796 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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