It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are conflicting views between whether the government should spend money on encouraging a healthy lifestyle and the public money should be used for treatment of people who have illness. From my perspective, I firmly agree with the first statement.
First, when it comes to price, promoting a healthy lifestyle is much more affordable than finding treatment for people with illness. The politicians can advocate the citizen with a healthier life by propagating on the Internet or on the TV and educating more at schools about taking more exercises, eating nutrient food and consume less fast food. Raising people’s awareness about a healthy lifestyle can the remove the existence of many diseases from the roots. Whereas, the cost of treating for intractable diseases is very high. And if they have insurances, the government have to pay more for them. Therefore, the expenses that the government have to invest in is much more expensive.
Moreover, there are many intractable diseases that just be prevented like HIV/AIDS or cancer… In fact, there are drugs and treatments prolonging the lives of patients suffering from diseases. However, all of the terminal diseases can be prevented if people follow a healthy habit. For instance, in recent time, the outbreak of COVID-19 make millions of people confront with the death, if prevention is underestimated, it will make the situation becoming worse and worse.
In a nutshell, I believe that the public money should be spent more on advocating people with a healthier lifestyle rather than spent it for treatment for people who are already ill due to the cheaper price and the outbreak of some diseases that have not got the effective treatment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ients suffering from diseases. However, all of the terminal diseases can be prevented if p...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...have not got the effective treatment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19855595668 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7908495564 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534296028881 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5092755277 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269389483178 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09013598258 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082301328575 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17392534549 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635151450557 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.